In Edition B: the gate report is still the cheapest real gain — Tavik says "say it to me again in the morning and I'll carry it up myself" and never does, and 615 words fixes it. The children finding the breathing stair is still unbuilt, so nobody in Haven ever learns that passage exists. Then the smaller ones: the far rows at nine fathom, the washing of Rampan and Korell, Eldric and Iona's give-back.Two things you still haven't ruled on: "aye" runs 162 per 100k against Book 1's 7.5, and your Style Guide bans four constructions your own manuscript leans on — "at the breath" (145), "at the angle" (148)
In Edition B: the gate report is still the cheapest real gain — Tavik says "say it to me again in the morning and I'll carry it up myself" and never does, and 615 words fixes it. The children finding the breathing stair is still unbuilt, so nobody in Haven ever learns that passage exists. Then th...